1. Wanda.
She has a wonderful holiday On her previous holiday she went back to her hometown... She really miss her family there After a long journey on bus from padang to jambi, Finally she met them In jambi She spent her holiday with her big family... It's quality time for her and her family. Their went to some places together and spent whole day together And on new year eve, she had a part with her big family Their baked corn,chicken,and made sate And her spent her few days there with her friend to hangout together had a lunch with her very best friend and their went karaoke.
2. Maharani
She had a great time. She spent
her holiday with her family. She was sharing with her mom about anything. She
cooked some of cake with her mom. Her sister said that cake was really
delicious.The first week her friend and her went to the zoo in bukittinggi.
Actually this time heavy rain but their was happy. She took some of picture and
saw animal in there. And then, she visited her grandmother and her aunt. Before that, she never spent holiday like that, when
she worked her free time only one day. But now she had one month with her
family.
wow..the sound great
BalasHapushmm (y) blog baru kak ??
BalasHapustman2, kasih komentar aja.
BalasHapusapa yg salah gt dari penulisan nya.
Nurul: bkan dek, tp emg gak dipake aja.
'She has a wonderful holiday' it should be 'she had a wonderful holiday'
BalasHapusGreat ..
BalasHapusI just sugest you to add coma after the first week and embed "In" before that ..
I'm sorry, if i wrong ..
"She cooked some of cake with her mom" it should be
BalasHapus"She cooked some of cakes with her mom"
" she had a part " u can add " she had a partY"
you have to put conjunction between one activity with another one, because if you don't put the conjunction the reader will get confused, example is this sentence "and made sate And her spent her few days there with her friend to hangout together had a lunch with her very best friend and their went karaoke", do Wanda, and her friends so her family had a new years eve party together and in the same place? where is it? you have to add more explanation i think. the sentence "her spent her few days there...." it should be "she spent few days there...".
BalasHapusthank you so much. My Movie Report please!
Hapus